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So my other writing thread kind of died due to the lack of of me writing things...I'd like to know if you guys would like me to continue posting things I write, if not, I'll just keep them to myself. Although their help was indirect, I'd like to thank Faliara and everyone else from GotE for rekindling my interest in fiction writing ;3

Two men faced each other in the arena. Not an uncommon event, fights like this were held every few days. Most, however, were not so controversial. Men volunteered to fight for all sorts of reasons. If they have nothing more to live for, they volunteer. If they've lost all of their money are are neck deep in debt, they volunteer. If they want to show their strength, they volunteer. And the list goes on. It was a way of life for the citizens of Glaend.

These two men were not normal citizens. They were arrested and found guilty of the assassination of King Turkin. The sentence: global exile. They two were never to enter a city again. Much to the public's chagrin, the to struck a deal with the late king's adviser. The two requested to fight each other in the arena. The king's adviser was not a lighthearted man; he was grave no matter the occasion, and not even he would deny them their request. Every man deserves one last fight. However, instead of the normal reward of material possessions, they requested that the winner be granted his freedom. The adviser scoffed at the request, and nearly sent them away on the spot. The men had killed the king, for pity's sake! But he knew that they'd have no use for money or goods in exile, and he knew he couldn't deny the winner his reward. Reluctantly, he agreed, and the fight was scheduled.

Despite the hatred the public had for the assassins, it didn't stop them from spectating the duel; they knew it'd be a good fight . They looked upon the duelists anxiously, waiting for the fight to start.

One man stood on the northern end of the arena. He was not a large man, but was obviously very fit. He had spent his entire fortune for his equipment. His armor was thick steel, the stark color a marked contrast to the lush grass. The individual pieces were trimmed a blood red, a color associated with retribution. The color came to be known as such when a petty thief stood before the king begging for mercy. King Turkin saw that the man was genuine, and so chose to console him. But the man had damaged himself severely. The man died slowly from his own wounds, and had bled profusely on the king. Now criminals wear the color to show that they regret what they did. Whether this assassin felt remorse was a mystery, but he was wearing the color.

Standing on the opposite side of the arena, the other man was much larger, and much stronger as well. His equipment was another marked contrast. It was entirely black, and it was impossible to tell when when piece of armor ended and another began. He was wearing the color of neutrality. This man knew what he had done, and known why. He did not regret it, and it was going to stay that way until he died.

Their weapons were also very different. The smaller clenched his left fist around a hammer. The hilt was covered by a criss-cross pattern of diagonal lines for grip, and from that extended nine inches of tempered steel topped with a heavy block of iron. In theme with his armor, the rod was embellished with crimson rings. On his back was a six foot spear with a razor tip, also themed with red rings at even intervals along the shaft. On his belt was his final armament: the kris he had used to stab the king in the back. It was exactly as it had been then, with the exception of King Turkin's blood.

The larger of the two men obviously had a more bloodthirsty approach to his gear. In his right hand he confidently held a large claymore. The hilt was brass, and had simple leather covers. The blade matched his armor and has jet black. He didn't plan to need it, but he had a scimitar sheathed at his belt. The blade was again black, and had to same utilitarian hilt as the claymore.

As the sun started to set, a horn blast rung out across the field and the battle began. The larger man closed the distance quickly and easily, brandishing his claymore over his left shoulder in a two handed stroke downward, hoping to end the battle quickly. The larger man may have been stronger, but he was clumsy. The smaller assassin ducked to the right, under his opponent's raised arm. When he got to the other side, he quickly spun clockwise around and slammed his hammer into charger's right side. He felt a satisfying thud and heard a crack. His armor may have looked intimidating, but it wasn't protecting him very well.

Enraged, he spun counterclockwise, his blade straight out in front of him, uninhibited by the pain. This time, the blow found it's mark. The target cringed as the claymore bit into his armor and cut through. He could feel hot blood escaping from his left shoulder inside his armor. He kicked the larger man away and dropped his hammer in favor of the spear at his back. As he predicted, fighting him up close was not going to work.

The larger man had to respect the slighter man's agility. That is, after all, the only reason he had manipulated him in the first place; he needed someone who could get in and out easily, but he still hated him for getting caught. He drove all of that hatred into his next charge. He barreled toward the pipsqueak and swatted the spear to the side, leaving a clear path for his claymore to follow.

The slight man saw the claymore about to bury itself in his neck and used the momentum of his swatted spear to jump to leave side and around, swinging the butt of the spear into the back of his aggressor's unarmored head, knocking him off balanced and leaving him dazed and surprised. He then took the opportunity to drive the spear forwards through the man's armor and into his back. The man fell forward with a thud, and the slight man yanked the spear back out, tearing a gaping hole in the poorly crafted armor. The man himself however, seemed unfazed, though was lying face down on the ground. Furthering his advantage, the assassin jumped onto his back, drew the kris from him belt and drove it into his former manipulator's back, just as he had the king's.
 

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For now, I plan to further this story along instead of creating a new one every time I go to write something.

"And the winner of the duel is Obelis!" The cry rang out over the arena and seemed to muffle the cheers of the crowd. They had seen his color choice and known that he was not fighting only for his freedom as his former partner had been. They knew he was fighting for redemption.

The cry came from an elevated and secluded area of the spectating area. There a boyish man around the age of twenty years was standing at the edge of the platform, gripping the rail. Although the duelist had killed his father, he knew that Obelis would do well with his freedom, while the other man, Eshro, would only kill again. Somehow, he could not see Obelis as the man that killed his father . Obelis merely did what he had to do. Eshro was the real murderer. In King Vaaren's eyes, Obelis had just avenged his father.

After the duel, Obelis was stopped by a member of the King's Guard and instructed to see the king immediately. The guard led him to the throne room and before a word could be said Obelis knelt before the new king and apologized. He did not make excuses. He did not even state his circumstances. He said only two words: "I'm sorry."

Vaaren was surprised despite his anticipation of the scenario, and simply sat upon his marble throne wide-eyed for a moment. After he recovered, he stood and extended a hand to the redeemed assassin. "No, Obelis. I wanted to thank you."

Obelis was taken aback. "But-" he stuttered, "I killed your father! How could you thank me for that!"

The king merely shook his head. "I'm not thanking you for killing my father. Eshro is the real murderer. I'm thanking you for avenging my father's death."

Obelis took Vaaren's hand and rose. "But- I killed King Turkin!"

The king put his hand on Obelis' shoulder. "And then you used the same knife to kill the true murderer." Vaaren paused, unsure how Obelis would react to his next statement. "I'd like to induct you as a member of the King's Guard."

The assassin responded as if Vaaren had physically pushed him. He reeled back and protested even more than before. "No! I killed your father and now you want to give me a high position of honor! No! It isn't right!"

"You may not have forgiven yourself, but I have." The king's voice remained ever calm.

Obelis' initial surprise had cleared and turned to anger. Whether it was at himself or the king, he did know. "I didn't ask for this. I asked for my freedom. That's all!"

"Your freedom wasn't all you wanted. I saw your armor. Everyone did. You made it painfully obvious that you were fighting to redeem yourself!" Vaaren's voice rose, but it was not in anger.

As Vaaren's voice rose slightly, Obelis' fell slightly. His conviction, however, remained constant. "My redemption was using the dagger that killed Kind Turkin. I don't need a spot in the King's Guard for that." Without another word, Obelis turned and briskly strode towards the door of the throne room. As he passed, the dark red banners hanging on either side seemed to sway, as if to keep him there a moment longer. Obelis, however, was uninhibited. He showed himself out of the throne room, out of the Royal Wing, and out the front gates of the keep. Then he realized...He had nowhere to go.
 
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Hey, check it out...Part three! ....It's five in the morning...Why did I do this? I did this for you. But mostly for me...Yeah...It was for me.

Obelis was a proud man, he knew he couldn't return King Vaaren. The king might consider him still, but Obelis would not forgive himself. After a brief moment of hesitation, he continued walking. Half a mile later, a short, pudgy man with a high voice and receding hairline ran up, shooed him into an alley and pulled an envelope from his pocket. His shrill voice pierced Obelis' ears like arrows, but at least the arrows would have had notes tied to them bearing pleasant news. He talked fast, and was barely comprehensible. "Hey hey hey! You ran off with some fancily clad knight or something after the fight before I could give you your cut!"-- It seemed that Obelis had to literally push the man off of him, he was just waving the envelope in his face. "What are you talking about "my cut"?"

The pudgy man glanced quickly from side to side, laughing nervously. "Hehe, I shouldn't be doin' this, but a few guys placed a couple a large bets on ya in that fight. They wanted me ta deliver the money ta you instead! Hehehe, here ya go!" He shoved the envelope into Obelis' hands and ran off.

Immediately, Obelis could feel the heft of the envelope, it was obvious it held quite a sum. He broke the seal and glanced inside; there were ten large platinum coins and a slip of paper. He removed the page and it read "There's a room reserved for you in the Leaky Dingy. It's already paid for. You'll find everything you need there."

It was too early to show up at an inn, only about five O'clock. He started towards the Tampered Tankard for a drink and a light meal when a sharp pain in his upper left arm reminded him of something: He still hadn't had his would treated. He'd need to see someone for a poultice or potion.

A poultice, a drink and a meal later, it was finally late enough for Obelis to retire to his bed. If he had a bed. He had been renting a place from a sleazy landlord. Needless to say, his contract was terminated when he killed King Turkin. He was grateful to whoever paid for his room, which as it turns out, had not been some cheap trick. Not that he had expected it to be, someone wouldn't pay ten platinum coins just to see the look on someone's face when they find out that they thought they had something they didn't.

A serving girl showed Obelis upstairs to his room. The room was very simplistic. It's contents, however, were obviously put there by whoever bought the room. Obelis' weapons from the duel were all there. Cleaned. Repaired. Pristine. The hammer had the large dent from the impact of Eshro's armor. The spear was cleaned of blood and the tip resharpened. The kris was also cleaned, but unlike before, had two gems hanging from either end of the blade guard. One a crimson ruby. The other an abyssal onyx stone. Both were identical in size and perfectly spherical. Obviously money was no object to whoever had done this for him.

As Obelis was standing in the doorway staring at his weapons, there was a polite cough from behind him. Obelis' head whipped around before the visitor could even begin to lower his hand from his mouth. He immediately started backing into the room and gesturing for the man to enter. On his way in, the stranger closed the door. The man took a step away from the door as not to be overheard. "I assume you have some questions."

Obelis simply stared at the man. The stranger was wearing full battle armor, with the exception of a helmet. His armor was obviously strong, yet shone like silver. On his breastplate were two golden perpendicular lines forming what appeared to be a cross. One of the four ends wrapped around his torso under his arm, but the other three ends seemed to flare out in what looked to be claws digging into the armor. The one horizontal end dug into the center of the stranger's chest, the topmost just under his neck, and the lowest end just under where his ribs would be. Overall, it appeared to form some sort of symbolic cage around the stranger's heart.

The visitor looked expectantly at Obelis, expecting at least one question. "No? Alright then, enjoy you free night in the inn I suppose," and he turned toward the door. He rotated enough for Obelis to see the final point of the cross. As expected, it wrapped all the way around and dug itself into the center of his back. What he did not expect to see, however, was another vertical line, identical to the one on the front.

"Wait!" Obelis was sure the entire inn heard him shout. He just hoped no one came up to investigate. "Why do all this? And for someone who murdered a king?"

The visitor answered the question with another. "Don't fool yourself, Eshro was the true killer. And you don't feel you've fully redeemed yourself, do you?"

Obelis looked down, embarrassed. He thought killing Eshro with the same dagger he had used against the king would be enough, but he wasn't satisfied. There was no hiding it. He knew it wouldn't benefit him to answer verbally, so he asked another question. "And what's up these?" Obelis held up the kris and shook it slightly, allowing the gems to dangle slowly.

"From here on, you are an initiate of the Rediment. We all have something we're not proud of, and our equipment reflects that uniquely. The gems on your dagger are yours. The ruby is the remind you that after all, you did still spill the blood of a king. The onyx, likewise, is to remind you that you did take steps to right that by avenging his death. This is not a request. You cannot decline this like you did the position in the King's Guard."
 

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Forced initiation... Woah. I do wonder what this means.

It was a rather nice touch with how you added those two gems to the kris. A reminder that he spilled the king's blood, but took steps to redeem that.

I'm still confused, though. Why'd he kill the king in the first place?
 

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Forced initiation... Woah. I do wonder what this means.

It was a rather nice touch with how you added those two gems to the kris. A reminder that he spilled the king's blood, but took steps to redeem that.

I'm still confused, though. Why'd he kill the king in the first place?
#spoilers
Edit: ok not really. All you need to know for now is that he "did what he had to" as said somewhere .-.
 

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Part four is here! It may be shorter, but is no less important!

Obelis was being led at forced march pace all morning before they finally seemed to reach a landmark. The man who had originally seen him at the inn was leading in front, and Obelis couldn't help but stare at the claws in his back. They almost seemed to shift every once in a while, as if renewing their grip. There were another two knights on either side of Obelis, and one behind. All of them were wearing full armor, as was Obelis. If he was being inducted into a guild, why did he feel like he was being imprisoned?

The landmark they reached looked like an alter, or some sort of well. It was circular, about eight feet across. There were black specks sprinkled over the white stone, and Obelis had to wonder where they had come from. The bottom seemed to flare out from the rest of the four foot tall cylinder, forming what two steps. The top of the cylinder was flat, but there was a circular dent in the center six inchest across and half as deep. One by one the escorts stepped forward and knelt at the alter, each pouring a small amount of liquid into the central bowl. Once all four of the were positioned around the alter, the leader instructed Obelis to step foward and submerge his kris in the liquid as best he could.

He was nervous, but did as he was told. The escorts all knelt with their heads bowed and for a moment, nothing happened. Then a beam of light shot down from the heavens onto the dagger. He looked up and saw someone, something? Descending from the sky down the beam. The being slowly descended and Obelis could only look on, dumbfounded that such a thing could be possible. The being appeared humanoid: just under six feet from head to toe, long, flowing golden hair draped over her shoulders, and a slim figure. Without toucching the alter, she spoke. "Obelis, I understand that you are seeking redemption for the murder of King Turkin. Correct?" Her voice was not so much spoken as much as simply injected directly into Obelis' thoughts. It was as if he himself was thinking the words, but in this heavenly being's voice.

Awestruck, Obelis tried to so much as stutter, but failed. He made no sound, his hands were shaking and he had no idea where this woman came from or what she was.

More thoughts were injected into his mind. They were soothing, and Obelis started to feel he could trust the woman, even if he knew nothing of her. "Do not speak aloud. I can hear your thoughts. They needn't even know of our correspondence." The thoughts ceased as Obelis glanced at the kneeling men around him. They did not continue until he looked back up at the floating woman, "I will send you on a journey. By the end of it, you will be redeemed in the eyes of not only others, but of yourself. Do you accept?"

The choice seemed obvious, of course he wanted to redeem himself. But he couldn't help but feel he was being manipulated...Again. He didn't mean to communicate with the being, but she heard him. "Then it is settled. Stay with these men until they are slain, then you shall begin your own quest." Confused and amazed, Obelis could only start blankly as the woman vanished into thin air and the light faded. The liquid in which he had submerged his dagger was gone, and he retrieved the kris.

Before he knew what was happening, the leader of the Redimet was laughing and heartily slapped him on the back. "So you've seen her, eh? So you really are meant to be one of us. In that case, we advance to the guild!" He turned and began down the trail. They other hastily followed, and it appeared that Obelis was no longer being imprisoned by their bodies and so chose to simply trail behind.
 

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'Until these men are slain'

... Okay, what

What

Woman, what was that

Are they actually going to die

In other news: well. For some reason, I didn't find that as good as it could have been. Perhaps it was simply your wording .-.
 

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'Until these men are slain'

... Okay, what

What

Woman, what was that

Are they actually going to die

In other news: well. For some reason, I didn't find that as good as it could have been. Perhaps it was simply your wording .-.
Yeah, it was a bit weak...I just wasn't feeling it tonight, but I already had it half written </3

And I can't answer that :D
 

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Part five has arrived! It should be better than the last part....If it's still subpar, then I have no excuse ;-;

"Halt!" The cry rang out from the trees on either side of the party. "You're all under arrest by order of the king!" Without hesitation, all four members of the Redimet drew their weapons. It was obvious these men knew they were outlaws and refused to go down easily. Obelis, however, was not so keen to die. He ran off into the trees, praying that he didn't run into more guards. He couldn't help but feel a bit guilty for the party's demise.

The group had originally been heading North, and Obelis had been running East for about ten minutes. He reched the edge of the forest and observed the terrain around him. The treeline seemed to stop arbruptly and was replaced by a lush plain. Some miles away he could he the ground rise in two hills. Having nowhere else to go, Obelis felt that he had been sentenced to exile after all.

Haunted by the screams of pain still carrying to him, he pressed on. In only a few minutes, he crested the first hill and on the other side he couldn't believe what he was seeing. More guards. He thought he'd be in the clear once he was out of the forest, but apparenly his hopes were in vain. The party approached Obelis hastily, inquiring if he'd seen a group of five armored men anywhere. "Four of those men are cult members that kidnap high ranking citizens and sacrificed them. Call themselves the 'Redimet.'"

Obelis' response seemed to come of its own volition. "The only men I've seen since I left town were guards. I heard some shouting from the forest a few minutes ago, though, maybe they found they group you're looking for." The party leader nodded his thanks and the group went on their way to the forest. Puzzled and afraid, Obelis simply kept walking; he knew he had to get as far away as he could.

He kept on in silence for a while, but inevitably, more words came from Obelis' mouth, and they were not his own. "They are slain. Are you ready to begin your quest?" He had begun to question this whole ordeal when the guard said the the Reditmet was a cult, but he had been made an offer that he couldn't refuse, not to mention he was being hunted. He hadn't so much as considered his answer before he was forced to speak again, "Then it is settled. I will guide you where you need to go."

Before, Obelis had still been able to move freely while his voice was speaking on its own, but now he was completely dominated by something, presumably the 'angel' he'd communicated with at the alter. He lost consciousness shortly after.

When he was once again self aware, he found himself in a clearing surrounded by dense trees and undergrowth. Some of it bore fruit, but the majority was dead. As dead as the bleeding man lying face down on the alter in front of him, Obelis' dagger in his back. Startled, he reeled back. A voice was injected into his thoughts, the same as his first commune. "You've done well." A beam of light shot down on the alter, and the corpse disintegrated. Nothing was left save the blood pooled in the center and Obelis' kris.

Enraged and betrayed, Obelis screamed, "What has this man done to wrong me?! Why have you killed him?!" The golden woman descended from the sky, just as before.

"I did not kill him. You sacfificed him in order to summon me. You are one step closer to redepmtion, but you've still a way to go." She seemed unmoved by Obelis' anger.

Seeing red, Obelis drew the spear from his back and swung it horizontally at the woman. However instead of hitting the target, the spear went into the light and out, with no time inbetween. I was as if the moment the spear touched the light and then simply appeared on the other side. Instantly, his mind was filled with thousands of thoughts pain, despair, misery, and he was flung back away from the alter.

It was several minutes before the thoughts faded, but the angel was gone and the bowl was once more empty. All he could do was retrieve his kris, but again, he had nowhere to go.
 

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Sorry Fali, I was sure I posted it this morning!

"Halt!" The cry rang out from the trees on either side of the party. "You're all under arrest by order of the king!" Without hesitation, all four members of the Redimet drew their weapons. It was obvious these men knew they were outlaws and refused to go down easily. Obelis, however, was not so keen to die. He ran off into the trees, praying that he didn't run into more guards. He couldn't help but feel a bit guilty for the party's demise.

The group had originally been heading North, and Obelis had been running East for about ten minutes. He reched the edge of the forest and observed the terrain around him. The treeline seemed to stop arbruptly and was replaced by a lush plain. Some miles away he could he the ground rise in two hills. Having nowhere else to go, Obelis felt that he had been sentenced to exile after all.

Haunted by the screams of pain still carrying to him, he pressed on. In only a few minutes, he crested the first hill and on the other side he couldn't believe what he was seeing. More guards. He thought he'd be in the clear once he was out of the forest, but apparenly his hopes were in vain. The party approached Obelis hastily, inquiring if he'd seen a group of five armored men anywhere. "Four of those men are cult members that kidnap high ranking citizens and sacrificed them. Call themselves the 'Redimet.'"

Obelis' response seemed to come of its own volition. "The only men I've seen since I left town were guards. I heard some shouting from the forest a few minutes ago, though, maybe they found they group you're looking for." The party leader nodded his thanks and the group went on their way to the forest. Puzzled and afraid, Obelis simply kept walking; he knew he had to get as far away as he could.

He kept on in silence for a while, but inevitably, more words came from Obelis' mouth, and they were not his own. "They are slain. Are you ready to begin your quest?" He had begun to question this whole ordeal when the guard said the the Reditmet was a cult, but he had been made an offer that he couldn't refuse, not to mention he was being hunted. He hadn't so much as considered his answer before he was forced to speak again, "Then it is settled. I will guide you where you need to go."

Before, Obelis had still been able to move freely while his voice was speaking on its own, but now he was completely dominated by something, presumably the 'angel' he'd communicated with at the alter. He lost consciousness shortly after.

When he was once again self aware, he found himself in a clearing surrounded by dense trees and undergrowth. Some of it bore fruit, but the majority was dead. As dead as the bleeding man lying face down on the alter in front of him, Obelis' dagger in his back. Startled, he reeled back. A voice was injected into his thoughts, the same as his first commune. "You've done well." A beam of light shot down on the alter, and the corpse disintegrated. Nothing was left save the blood pooled in the center and Obelis' kris.

Enraged and betrayed, Obelis screamed, "What has this man done to wrong me?! Why have you killed him?!" The golden woman descended from the sky, just as before.

"I did not kill him. You sacfificed him in order to summon me. You are one step closer to redepmtion, but you've still a way to go." She seemed unmoved by Obelis' anger.

Seeing red, Obelis drew the spear from his back and swung it horizontally at the woman. However instead of hitting the target, the spear went into the light and out, with no time inbetween. I was as if the moment the spear touched the light and then simply appeared on the other side. Instantly, his mind was filled with thousands of thoughts pain, despair, misery, and he was flung back away from the alter.

It was several minutes before the thoughts faded, but the angel was gone and the bowl was once more empty. All he could do was retrieve his kris, but again, he had nowhere to go.

EDIT: Wait what?
....I'M SO CONFUSED

For some reason I thought the tread was a chapter behind my writing, but it's not. Sorry >n<
 
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